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Postby MattRyd » Fri Aug 08, 2008 2:38 pm

PHollens wrote:I think he's just saying the melody/harmony that I think your going for in your rough mix is extremely close to that of Moondance..... ala :40-:52 etc....in your original piece.


This is what I was wondering about when I asked about a sampled chorus melody. I know how much it sucks when you work on a song and suddenly some jerk comes along and says: "Oh, wow, that sounds exactly like {insert popular song here}!" and I didn't want to pull that on you.

Now that it has been brought up, though... It might behoove you to change up that melody a little bit to avoid this in the future. And please don't take this as any sort of slight or insult, because it happens to every songwriter. I once inadvertently rewrote the theme from "Hook." :-P

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Postby GenesisPhreak » Fri Aug 08, 2008 3:18 pm

ill figure it out in due time, but this is why i posted the song in the first place so thanks for all the input so far and I welcome any further comments. not a snobby artist, I just want to write the best music I can.
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Postby phollens » Fri Aug 08, 2008 3:24 pm

MattRyd wrote:
PHollens wrote:I think he's just saying the melody/harmony that I think your going for in your rough mix is extremely close to that of Moondance..... ala :40-:52 etc....in your original piece.


This is what I was wondering about when I asked about a sampled chorus melody. I know how much it sucks when you work on a song and suddenly some jerk comes along and says: "Oh, wow, that sounds exactly like {insert popular song here}!" and I didn't want to pull that on you.

Now that it has been brought up, though... It might behoove you to change up that melody a little bit to avoid this in the future. And please don't take this as any sort of slight or insult, because it happens to every songwriter. I once inadvertently rewrote the theme from "Hook." :-P


If you don't want constructive critism, he wouldn't have posted. Better to be upfront and honest if someone wants to improve their craft. Ahren's an adult he wants real feedback.
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Postby GenesisPhreak » Fri Aug 08, 2008 3:39 pm

true, but i do appreciate his effort to be discreet none the less. I will say that I have a very thick skin and can take any constructive criticism. Just stay away from the fat jokes and we'll be all good.
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